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She stands there now.
A Goddess amongst humble men
Never before, a more perfect incarnation
Of idle beauty, grace and charm

I stare upon this creature of finite magic
The Gods have truly favoured her.
Even the great figures of Aphrodite and Hera, Goddesses themselves
Have found their match in this fairest of maidens.

But what am I?
But a humble peasant I do be.
Struggling to make myself known to others.
But failing at every turn.

She is joined by her Princes.
More fitting suitors than I.
For their feats are known for far and wide.
Mine own little more than dust on the infinite winds.

She leaves me now.
I stand alone again.
Her glowing aura fades.
My chance once again gone.

But who am I?
To challenge the order of things?
I know my place, and I will stay there
No matter how I try.

So I shoulder my duties
My tasks, my works.
For though I have little hope of success,
I have the ability to try.
Just an experimental poem... You can probably guess the title.

Don't ride me too hard about grammar. Its just free verse.
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Cheeky-Lil-Phoenix Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
:happycry: that is beautiful my god declan that really gripped me it's so amazing
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Burkle Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2006
wow, I wasn't even sure if I was gonna post this one... glad I did :D thanx alot, especially for the +fav. ^_^
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Cheeky-Lil-Phoenix Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
omg your welcome it's so beautifully put together :nod:
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Burkle Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2006
wow, I'm glad you liked it. You should read my other poem, I think its much better than this one...
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Cheeky-Lil-Phoenix Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
i don't think so this one is great!!
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Burkle Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2006
thanx :) glad you think so highly of it
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Cheeky-Lil-Phoenix Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2006  Professional Digital Artist
yeah i do :hug:
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Burkle Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2006
:) :hug:
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Hattey Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice. I like it.
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2006
glad you do :)
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pagonchick101 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2006   Writer
Wow! Your realy good! Keep it up!!! :thumbsup:
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2006
Am I? lol ^^; I really wasn't too sure about this one.
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pagonchick101 Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2006   Writer
^_^
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2006
:D
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Metamorphosis-Child Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2006
O.o wow ur awsome at poetry too, the pace of the words and the format is really good . :D
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2006
really? I wasn't sure about this one... I wrote it after school because this is pretty much my situation right now.... but don't let the trivial details of my life bother you...
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Metamorphosis-Child Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2006
its a good poem :) all the more if you wrote it from the heart...its not good to feel so inferior to others though.. if you like you should go talk to her, you have as much right as her "Princes".
*sucks at giving advice* ^^;
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2006
thanx :). I was using the notion of medieval class structures as a metaphor for the idea of the similar class structures in high schools, where you have the individual triers, popular jocks, cheerleaders, and local celebs being on top, "normal" people in the middle, and the quiet ones on the bottom. She's at the top of the order, while I'm at the bottom, "a humble peasent" to quote myself. I don't really think that she'd go for me next to the competition.... and you don't suck at giving advice
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Metamorphosis-Child Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2006
i got that :D its a cool way of doing it too. anyway good luck what ever you do, i think u have a chance, my friend when she saw ur ID thought u looked like jonny depp ^^;
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2006
Johnny Depp? hmm, I guess thats another positive reference. :D lol, now I've been compared to Johnny Depp, Orlando Bloom, and Jesus! ^_^, though Im not too sure about the last one.
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Metamorphosis-Child Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2006
XD thats hilarious
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Burkle Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2006
:D what can I say? I'm planning on ordering a shirt of Red vs Blue that says "you shall worship me as though I were a god so... :)
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